The argument

Posted: May 20, 2012 in nature poems, Poetry

This weekend dversepoets is encouraging us to use verbs from one arena and apply them to another. Here I use nature to put a different perspective on human emotions.

Iron sky,
steel river.
There’s an edge to the day.
Steady rain sulks its way
over the landscape.
Rain-slicked
muscular trees
flex their branches
in a rising wind.

Finally
the storm breaks.
Wind rips through,
stripping trees.
Birds and leaves tumble
over the fields.
River rages as it flees to the sea.
And in the black cold night
shocked stars blink back the tears

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Comments
  1. Loved how you used those power verbs to describe nature. Very effective response to the prompt.

  2. ManicDdaily says:

    Really wonderful. A very creative response to the prompt that works just terrifically. K>

  3. claudia says:

    great job on capturing the emotions with the language of nature..the trees flexing branches, the wind ripping through trees…better not come too close to someone in a mood like this…could be dangerous..smiles

  4. hedgewitch says:

    You’ve definitely used personification intensely throughout here, and it culminates very effectively in the closing. I esp. like the rain sulking and the metal descriptors at the opening.

  5. brian miller says:

    oo i like the stars blinking back tears….there is also a wicked intensity that comes with the storm…the flexing muscles of the tree, very cool…there is even intensity in the dissipation of hte storm…cool take on the prompt…

  6. Wow! This is fantastic! You nailed it, and it’s filled with some of the best lines I’ve heard in a long time! The last two get my highest compliment; “BAM! You nailed it!”
    An awesome poem!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/05/19/no-autopsy-needed/

  7. Dick Jones says:

    Some sharp and apposite images here combining to personify the storm to vivid effect.

  8. Shocked stars blink back the tears… Love that. Really nice piece that took me on a journey.

  9. hypercryptical says:

    A superb write!

    Anna :o]

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