Taking a break

Posted: February 9, 2016 in default

at http://dversepoets.com/this-is-us/ we are meeting the challenge of writing a 44 word poem to include the word ‘lull’

Sky is beaten to the colour of slate,
brooding but briefly spent.

And for now the wind is nothing
more than a leaf-whisperer.

In this quiet the river clings to its bed,
trembling woods are still full of panic.

This lull will not last.

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Comments
  1. Grace says:

    I admire the wind as leaf-whisperer ~ Indeed the lull of the storm will not last ~ Love the share Paul ~

  2. Sumana Roy says:

    love how you weaved fear in the moment of lull…

  3. Love the leaf whisperer!

  4. whimsygizmo says:

    “for now the wind is nothing
    more than a leaf-whisperer.”

    ohhhhhh. I am truly lulled by this. Thank you.

  5. Oh this is marvelous.. I like how you personify the nature… it’s like a beast that’s out to get you… A lull with lots of tension.

  6. Oh, I love this. You’ve chosen each word so thoughtfully to create just the right atmosphere. I really like how the word “brooding” ties into the prompt word, lull. Wish I’d written this.

  7. “trembling woods are still full of panic.” I love this poem – sheer beauty

  8. Mary says:

    Very effectively penned! No, one has to appreciate the lulls while they happen but they definitely will NOT last!

  9. Bodhirose says:

    This is enchanting! I love the idea of the river clinging to its bed and the trembling woods in a panic…waiting for the lull to be over. I love your poem!

  10. Stunning imagery. I love the build up, the contrasts between the storm and the lull, but most of all the ending that leaves a punch. My favourite tonight!

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