Posted: April 21, 2015 in nature poems, urban poems

at http://dversepoets.com/this-is-us/ today we’re going all octet

Harsh chatter cuts through the baking
air seething across our roof tiles.
They are arrogant, ice-eyed, chopping up
a blackbird’s melody that’s been flooding
the river’s beat. Theirs is not birdsong,
just nature’s practical edge.
Functional. A rooting in the ordinary.
Like that faint rocking of traffic.

  1. There is a menace in those Jackdaws. No birdsong in a murder of crows.

  2. “Theirs is not birdsong,
    just nature’s practical edge.”

    Ah! I like that. Very well-penned. 🙂


  3. Very vivid. I can almost hear it.

  4. Harsh chatter — that pretty much sums up any bird in the crow family. I’m with Bjorn, there’s no birdsong in a murder of crows. Peace, Linda

  5. true… someone needs to tell them they cannot hit whatever notes they constantly aim for… lol.

  6. Ah.. yes Nature is
    all about the business
    of life.. while we worry
    over burned out cookies..
    Nature moves on to
    the next rooftop of
    only worries in survival
    for now.. as is real…:)

  7. zongrik says:

    i like the hard consonant sounds in this

    Things Could Be More Reliable

  8. Kathy Reed says:

    The crudeness of nature…comes to mind the book “For Everything There is a Season”. …warnings to all.

  9. C.C. says:

    I love the sound of this. The word choices, the placement of sounds….reading it aloud is poetry at its finest.

  10. lynn__ says:

    You succinctly captured the harsh, arrogant, practical edge of jackdaws’ clamor…and traffic.

  11. Very nice. I love the word “ice-eyed”….how chilling.

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