Eternally spoken

Posted: October 9, 2014 in default

at today Björn wants us to write true avant-garde in the spirit of Gertrude Stein…focusing mainly on sound and simple objects and doing our own verbal cubism

Under a vast valley sky
booming rebounds beyond
the Western ridge
and bruised clouds
are carrying in a storm.
Wind snaps
through olive trees,
sweeps over the terrace
sending paper napkins
butterflying over the edge.
It silences an Italian couple,
their salad fluttering
their words
carried out of Canalicchio
to spiral away.

  1. Mary says:

    I love the idea of paper napkins butterflying over the edge. And I can just picture the look on the face of the Italian couple with their salad fluttering. Smiles.

  2. The bruised clouds is such an interesting combination of adjective and noun.. like tender buttons create a new image.. the wild salad is for sure an interesting concept.

  3. brian miller says:

    ha. the paper napkin butterfly is pretty cool….sounds like you are in for quite the storm…the bruised sky is quite vivid….

  4. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Paul, love that you entered into the spirit of the prompt, creating interesting verbal cubism, but more to my liking, there is still the veneer of cohesion to the lines, staying in one sphere, one place, illuminating events without flying off into the margins.

  5. bleibalien says:

    Groovy piece. Love- “their salad fluttering dangerously”

  6. Gabriella says:

    I like the wisp of Italy I read and feel in your words. Your poem made me think of a Tuscan evening.

  7. Sumana Roy says:

    fluttering napkins, flying salad and bruised clouds are fantastic….

  8. claudia says:

    oh i love the butterflying paper napkins…very cool image..

  9. hypercryptical says:

    Butterflying paper napkins – Lovely.
    Anna :o]

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