Dawn’s shroud

Posted: April 25, 2013 in nature poems

Tonight at dversepoets.com Sam Peralta has challenged us to write a sijo – a Korean form of 3 lines containing between 14 and 16 syllables – and its doesn’t end there. Each half-line ideally should contain a 3-5 syllable metre. No  pressure then! But huge fun. Go on over there and check out what people have been writing. Here’s my effort.

Beyond mist a blackbird’s lone song reveals the woodland is still there.
While we wait for this mesh to shred, dew diamonds jewel grassy tussocks,
and dawn shrouds this quiet hollow. Wind cannot breach this confined space.

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Comments
  1. Laurie Kolp says:

    Gorgeous! I especially like:

    dew diamonds jewel grassy tussocks,
    and dawn shrouds this quiet hollow.

  2. brian miller says:

    smiles…wonderful imagery…and def pass through a few of these hollows where the wind wont go on my way to work every day….i like the call of the bird reminding you what is on the other side of that mesh/fog…cool sijo

  3. aprille says:

    You are giving us such a glorious stage set for the bird’s concert

  4. Rowan Taw says:

    Wonderful imagery – oh to be in the woods at dawn again.

  5. Grace says:

    Laurie quoted my favorite line too ~ I love the image of dawn shrouding the quiet hollow ~ Beautiful sijo ~

  6. claudia says:

    oh i love how the blackbird reminds us that the woodland is still there…love all the images the dew jewels…gorgeous

  7. Kelvin S.M. says:

    ..blackbird’s loan song — ah, i liked that…. smiles…

  8. Tony Maude says:

    Stunningly beautiful; you took me straight to some of my favourite places….

  9. David King says:

    This is really impressive. Thanks for it.

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