The girl at Carluccio’s

Posted: June 15, 2012 in urban poems

At dversepoets an excellent challenge has been laid down about modernism. Here I present a poem with the shape/structure conveying the subject while the underlying issue addresses a very modern problem of eating disorders.

She’s
so
imposs-
ibly
thin
there’s
no
ro
om
to
fit
her
bones
and
org
ans
in

 

 

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Comments
  1. brian miller says:

    oy…nice use of form to accentuate the message…there comes a point where thin is just not sexy but painful…have a good blog friend that just wrote a book on eating disorders because she was def trapped in one…

  2. Gay says:

    Well not a triversen (you might like to try it later, I’ve found it to be a really good vehicle in the poems I’ve read today for carrying a modern or if you like contemporary message). This poem seems to be to fall under the heading of concrete or shaped poems. They were put forward initially by Guillaume Apollinaire in Paris about 1900. I think I wrote an article about them a few months back. This one is especially effective and definitely falls in the definition of “modernism”. Thanks.

  3. Susan says:

    I LOVE concrete poetry! Bravo! Fine word image and form together make me wince.

  4. marousia says:

    Wonderful concrete poem – I like what you did with the shape

  5. Ravenblack says:

    I was reading an article on the “thinspiration” thing that is apparently hot with some girls. Scary, how thin some girls make themselves, bones sticking out, kinda like jutting out like some of the words in your poem here like that. Cool piece and illustrates your point.

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