Love gone bad

Posted: April 26, 2012 in Poetry

Today dVerse Poets, has us focusing on allegory – an interesting challenge!  Here is a simple observation. The message is in the title, the symbolism is in the blackberries rotted on the bushes.

Blackberries now live up to their name.
Shrivelled remains of onyx fruit
blasted in autumnal heat
raging through hedgerows.

Leaves have become the glory,
a firestorm of red and bronze.
Flames among brittle thorns, but
the cindered fruits are long past
their sell-by date.

  1. Laurie Kolp says:

    Ooh… this is amazing. I really like the last three lines, too.

  2. Perfectly chosen symbols for the topic, Paul. Made me think of the summer romances we used to conjure up as teenagers on vacation. I think the title, even without the process note, helps the reader to follow and works well.

  3. brian miller says:

    nice…really well done…the fruit having long dried up its all in the leaves…nice play on words that…this is a really tight write…i like…

  4. Very nice descriptors, I agree with Brian it’s tight.

  5. Shawna says:

    Love this:

    “lackberries now live up to their name.
    Shrivelled remains of onyx fruit”

  6. claudia says:

    lot of love is rotting somewhere out on the bushes and trees…well played

  7. Really potent images.

  8. gerry snape says:

    Blackberries now live up to their name!….that’s a line I’d like to have thought of myself!… could just hear that becoming a normal saying about love gone bad! Thankyou.

  9. clawfish says:

    Vivid and full of meaning , so very well put

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